I am beyond interested, I am totally reading it and going to comment on it soon! :)
I write very little fanfiction --- well these days I write very little original fiction too, so that doesn't say that much. :P But there are some things that are very different for me about my work in different genres that are hard to carry over --- for me it's not tense, but length of scenes? If I had been writing this as not-fan-fiction it would have been so much longer because I would have felt the need to set the stage a lot more clearly and build things up really slowly and all of the scenes would have been like 3000-6000 words instead of 500-2000. But here that's a problem; we all know what the pokemon universe looks like and that's generally not what we're here to see.
I think that's part of why the Arceus thing doesn't work (aside from the obvious "wrote it the two days before the deadline and found myself in a corner" kind of storytelling issues, which are totally there) --- it breaks the assumptions that you have about what sort of things can happen in the story and doesn't provide much explanation about what new set of things might be happening instead. (Incidentally this is another thing I liked about your story --- I think you did a great job of setting and massaging those assumptions in the first few scenes.)
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I write very little fanfiction --- well these days I write very little original fiction too, so that doesn't say that much. :P But there are some things that are very different for me about my work in different genres that are hard to carry over --- for me it's not tense, but length of scenes? If I had been writing this as not-fan-fiction it would have been so much longer because I would have felt the need to set the stage a lot more clearly and build things up really slowly and all of the scenes would have been like 3000-6000 words instead of 500-2000. But here that's a problem; we all know what the pokemon universe looks like and that's generally not what we're here to see.
I think that's part of why the Arceus thing doesn't work (aside from the obvious "wrote it the two days before the deadline and found myself in a corner" kind of storytelling issues, which are totally there) --- it breaks the assumptions that you have about what sort of things can happen in the story and doesn't provide much explanation about what new set of things might be happening instead. (Incidentally this is another thing I liked about your story --- I think you did a great job of setting and massaging those assumptions in the first few scenes.)